Week 2 Story: Three Roses
Three Roses
There once was a caring mother with three daughters. The family was running low on supplies so the mother planned a trip to the market. Before she left the mother asked her daughters what they wanted from the market. The two eldest girls supplied a long list of wants. The youngest, however, just wanted three Roses.
The family lived deep in the woods so the trip would take two days time. After collecting all the supplies that were needed the mother started to head back home. With such a heavy load, the mother needed a rest. It was getting dark and she could hear the animals coming out to search for food under the moon. She saw an old looking palace and decided to hurry there for refuge for the night.
The mother had never seen this palace but it seemed extremely old. The only thing that was in good condition was the rose garden to the side of the palace. She had already bought her daughter the three roses but these were so much more beautiful.
As soon as she picked them she was frightened by what she could only call a monster. He threatened to kill her but she begged for mercy. She explained that her nice little daughter just asked for roses and she wanted to share the beauty of these roses with her youngest daughter. The beast proposed a deal. The mother would be spared as long as she brought her daughter to live with him. The mother felt like she had no choice but to say yes.
When she got home she explained to the daughter what had happened and what will happen. The youngest daughter didn't seem mad or anxious at all she without hesitation headed to the run-down castle to carry out the deal the monster had proposed.
The monster had her take care of him for three days but then demanded she kill him. Scared for her life, she did as the monster demanded. As soon as she beheaded him an attractive prince materialized in front of her eyes. According to the Prince, they must marry in live out their days in the castle. Again without conflict, the girl did it to make sure she kept her end of the deal. She never broke her ultimate deal either, she never broke her marriage.
Three Roses: One of the main focuses of both the original and my story.
Authors Note:
I mainly kept to the original story here. I emphasized deals more and changed the setting of some of the scenes. Other than that this story goes along with the original.
Bibliography: "The Key of Gold" from Myth-Folkmore by Josef Baudis Web source
(This is a "Let's Pretend-style comment.)
ReplyDeleteHey Maryellen, one of the older sisters here. The youngest sister always gets off the hook with audiences and the two of us always get a bad rap. It's easy to think that she's the angel child since she only asked for a handful of flowers, but think about it -- that might be the LEAST practical gift you could ask for. You said it yourself: Times were tough for our family and we were scraping by. Do you think we had money lying around to purchase the baby of the family a bouquet just because she thought it looked pretty? But no, we're the villains because we asked for a "long list" of supplies. Here's some food for thought: It takes quite a bit to feed and shelter a family of four, even if they're living day-to-day. We eldest sisters are the only ones who put any thought to the long-term needs of the family (how much food we'll need for the month, the supplies to patch the leak in the cottage roof, blankets for the coming winter) but she's still the golden child, even though she's too self-absorbed to give any thought to the future of the family. And then, as if it isn't enough already, she gets abducted for theft of property and winds up with a prince out of the whole deal? Ridiculous.
(Nice job with your story -- you kept it short and sweet while still maintaining the core plot elements.)
Hey there Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story it had an amazing plot, and kept my attention all the way throughout the story. It was very interesting how the monster was incorporated into the story. I thought you did a great job at keeping the original plot of the story. I thought the story was a perfect length, and I look forward to reading your future stories!
Hello Maryellen, I absolutely loved reading your story! It was a nice length and kept me completely interested throughout the duration of reading. I loved your new kind of take with the monster and it was very true to the original story, so kudos to you on that! I wrote a story without changing up the ending as a way of respecting the original, so I love that, too!
ReplyDeleteHello Maryellen, I really liked your story. You kept it consistent with the original while adding your own elements, such as the mother remembering to buy the roses originally, it made her seem more attentive to her daughter. One thing you might consider is adding some dialog in order to make it more captivating, perhaps between the mother and the daughter or the mother and the beast. It would give the characters more personality. You could also give your characters names. It makes it more personal if the main characters, such as the mother and the main daughter had names. One other thing is there were a couple of repetitive words such as mother and palace, you can use the pronoun she a few more times or give the mother a name to avoid this. For palace you could find synonyms such as building or castle. There were a few others you might change as well. Other than that I think your story is excellent and I enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteHi Maryellen!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story. You really kept true to the original with all of the original plot points. I also liked that you didn't give the main characters any names. I think that added some anonymity to the story which I liked. I do wish that you had given more information into the beast's back story. I feel like he gets a bad rep without a lot of back story. I can't wait to see more from you this semester!
Hello, Maryellen!
ReplyDeleteI must say that you wrote a fantastic story! I really like your take on “The Three Roses”. I think the thing that I appreciate the most is that while you kept the majority of the story the same, you were a little bit more realistic about the way the female protagonist responded to the situation. As I am sure any filial child would do, the daughter made sure to keep up their end of the bargain. However, in your story, she did not do so mainly because she fell in love with the monster – she did it to ensure that there were no repercussions to breaking the deal. I am curious to know what kind of monster you had in mind when you were writing this story. I would suggest that you try to give us a little bit more information about the beast and the maiden in order to make us like/sympathize with them a little bit more