Introduction to Why You Want to Go Into Advertising
Why Advertising is Amazing Hi! I'm Maryellen! I grew up in Houston, Texas and am now a senior that is studying Advertising. I decided to study Advertising on a whim and didn't give much thought to it, I guess back then I just knew without really knowing. Advertising is taught in Gaylord Hall Going into Advertising has been one of the best decisions of my life. I get to interact with people all day while working toward a common goal. The great thing about Advertising is that it is usually held in such a fun environment. I am an Operations Director for Lindsey + Asp, the student-run agency on campus, and I couldn't think of a better environment to work in. People are creative, and a little weird and we get to come up with the grandest ideas that we actually implement in national campaigns. Typically some of the qualities you find in someone in advertising can be seen as a weakness in other areas of work. A lot of us are ADHD, we talk too much and we
Hi Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI like how you told a story that had to do with an upcoming holiday. I think it is fun to try to center stories around actual events that are upcoming in your own life. I am glad Cupid had pity for Psyche. By doing so, she got to sustain her personality and a nice life for a little bit longer. I wonder how Psyche's life would have progressed if her sister's had not convinced her to try to discover who her husband actually was. Maybe Venus would have found her, and then that makes me wonder which outcome was actually worse. What if Cupid had undone his magic, so that Psyche could know both who her husband was and how much he loved her? I can see how this tragic tale would be foreboding to others, and I agree that people should be more wary about who or what they are actually falling in love with.
Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI loved this reinterpretation of the classic story. It is probably one of the favorite ones that I have read; the ending where Psyche accidentally stabbed herself was so tragic and yet really fitting. I especially loved the character expansion with the inclusion of her sisters. It also gives the reader more insight on what Psyche was like. I wonder if Cupid was unfair to her; it is asking a lot to trust someone and be their spouse but never getting to know them. The parameters seemed unfair to begin with, and him leaving her at the end has alway seemed cruel to me. With her stabbing himself, does he just leave her? Or does he help reverse the effects of the arrow. If he leaves her after she becomes infatuated, it becomes all the more tragic (which I wholeheartedly support. I love tragedies, just wondering your intended effect). This is great start to your portfolio, I can't wait to see what else you add to it!
-Moriah C.
Hi Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your story! I really loved reading it and loved that you connected it to Valentine's Day. You are really great at giving substantial background to the characters. I can tell that you put alot of thought into the characters of Psyche and Cupid. The characterization makes the story that much more intriguing to the reader. Additionally, I absolutely love the message behind the story. I think it's such an important thing to realize. Even better I love that you highlighted the girl's mind rather than any physical attribute. There are so many different aspects of the story that would be crazy had one decision been made differently? What if Cupid had allowed Psyche the opportunity to know of her husband's true feelings and not just the fabricated one's produced from the arrow? This is such a great story and I am so impressed. I can't wait to continue reading more of your stories this semester!
Hey there Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you told the story and linked it to a holiday that is coming up. I think it is easier for the writer to center your story about actual events that are upcoming or happening in their life. This is because it is relevant to them and it is easier to make up events in a story from it. I really enjoyed how you expanded the characters to including the sisters. I am wondering to myself if cupid was unfair to her and was not trustworthy. I really enjoyed how your story closely followed the plot of the original story, and I could tell that you really focused on your writing in this story. The story was very well written, and the story book page was very organized and well thought out. This is a really great story and I look forward to reading your future stories!
Hey Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI know that some others mentioned this but I found it really cool how you connected the story to Valentine’s Day. I think it definitely helps readers better understand the story as it is something that is relevant to all of us. I also really like the set up of your portfolio page. I think that the photo also adds a little bit of flair to the structure of the site overall. I think it may be good to potentially put a different photo on your cover though, maybe something relating to Valentine’s Day or roses? I also like how you put the comment wall on the first page as I feel it makes it easy to get to it. I really enjoyed what you did with the plot of the story. I think it is a really good switch from the original story it makes it that much more interesting.
Hey Maryellen!
ReplyDeleteI personally think it is great that you connected your story to Valentine's Day, which is really interesting and engaging, and I wish I had thought of trying to connect my story to a holiday or celebration because that idea rocks and makes the story even more accessible. I also really enjoy the layout and design of the portfolio itself! I think I should take a few notes from you, but I think if you changed up your cover photo and changed it to fit the theme and mood of each story. I really enjoyed reading your story, and I am really looking forward to being able to see and read more of them in the future! Keep being great and doing great things!
The first thing I noticed was how much you were able to shorten Cupid and Psycho! I read that in a previous week and found it really challenging to shorten it while keeping it interesting.
ReplyDeleteYou may want to emphasize how Psyche never got to see Cupid - since I read the story myself, I knew that, but it's such a brief statement that it kind of escapes the reader. Other than that, I think you did a really good job building suspense and showing the reader how tragic this story is.
As for the second story, I really enjoyed the light tone that you start with, followed by the really bizarre and violent ending! I think the absurdity of fairy tales is one of my favorite things about them. I wonder some about the back story of the three characters in this story! What do Scorpion and Tortoise have in common?
Hi Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI'm excited to see your portfolio project for the first time! This week we're supposed to focus on feedback about images, so that's why most of my comments will be about that. One thing I noticed is that the cover image for your home page is a little pixellated/blurry. If you can, you might want to use a larger photo because then it'll be clear. I love the image you have right now though! It looks super fun.
For the story Psyche & Cupid, I think the images you're using are perfect! The soft ocean/sky picture at the top conveys a really romantic atmosphere which helps to set the tone for the story.
The image in the middle of your story is also really appropriate and I love how it helps me visualize the characters better.
On the Betrayal page, the image of the tortoise and the scorpion is really cool. I love how you found an illustration to pair with your story. However, maybe the cover image could be more relevant to the story? Maybe a dark and broody sky would help convey the idea of betrayal, while still being consistent with the cover image of your previous story and without being too direct.
Overall, I love your portfolio so far! I think the stories you've told so far are really interesting and the way you've retold them really gives them a new life. Good luck with the rest of your semester!
Hello!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the stories you've written thus far. Your story of betrayal was fun, folksy, and told an important moral. The events that transpire don't seem to jump about illogically or lead to speedy conclusions, so it feels like something you could find in a book of fables. Your adaption of two stories into one feels close to seamless.
One thing that stood out to me was in Psyche and Cupid, Psyche's sisters seem to conclude she's married to a god with little secondary thought or exposition to it. Perhaps easing into this conclusion a bit more smoothly would aide in the story. As well, it seems to jump toward the ending rather quickly. However, the dialogue in the story is strong and draws you into it fully, and the imagery really helps in getting a full picture of the story.
I'm excited to see what further stories you create!
Hi!
ReplyDeleteI had the opportunity to read you first story and decided to come back this week for your second. You did a fantastic job, especially with the additions you made to the original story. Adding the Hare is such a great idea and definitely makes the story a bit more entertaining in my opinion. I also agree that keeping the other two original characters definitely makes the plot of the story unfold in a more natural way. I also really love that you included dialogue in this story. It definitely allowed to break up the longer paragraphs and make it easier for the reader to follow. Such a great tactic that I also use in my own stories! Great job!
Hey howdy Maryellen!
ReplyDeleteI remember reading your story on the three roses all the way back in January. I am stoked that you chose to include it in your semester project. The tibs that you offer in your notes on storytelling, by the way, are pretty insightful. Being more thoughtful about the writing that we come up with is super important and can also be pretty evident in the final product. I am glad to see that you have put so much care and intention into these posts. The story of Psyche and Cupid is a favorite of mine. I remember reading it in The Golden Ass but I swear yours was more enjoyable to read. That could have been because of how long the "original is" though ha! Overall, the layout of your site is great. The banner image and the ones with each post are striking while still being in agreement with the topic.
Hi Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI think it is super cool that you have included the story of Psyche and Cupid in your portfolio project. That story is one of my favorites and in fact, I did a retelling of it myself. When I retold it, I didn't change much because I really enjoy the original version. However, I thought you did a great job of retelling it. Your version is much better than mine! You managed to keep it so short and simple yet still convey the important aspects of the story. I struggled with this, and my own version was not very good because of it, so I definitely appreciated how well you did it. The lesson you gave at the end of the story is similar to what I am doing for my storybook. Mine is about Apollo lamenting his lost loves and trying to warn others away from love. Different, but similar. I also thought it interesting how you had Psyche die by stabbing herself with the arrow by accident.
Good job!
ReplyDeleteHey Maryellen,
I loved reading your version of Psyche and Cupid. You did such a great job of retelling it in the "fable" way that you were after because I was totally getting the fable vibe by the end of the story. This week we are supposed to focus on your author's note, so I have just a couple quick comments about it. I love that you explained WHY you wrote the story, and what you liked about it coming into it. You also did a great job of explaining the variations from your story to the original. The details about keeping the focus away from Venus are important, and I'm glad you decided to mention those things in the author's note! Lastly, it was great that you listed your motives in the author's note. It really helped me connect the reasoning for certain features of the story back to what your original purpose was. Anyway, you did a great job! Enjoy the last few weeks of the semester!
Brady
Hi Maryellen,
ReplyDeleteI have really enjoyed reading through your project. The website looks fantastic, and I found the images to be really nice. The navigation was super easy.
I thoroughly enjoyed your story of "The Tortoise, the Scorpion, and the Hare." The way in which you changed the story of the Tortoise and the Scorpion and combined it with the famous tale of the Tortoise and the Hare was fantastic. I can't believe that the Scorpion was trying to stab his friend in the back. Good thing that tortoises have a super hard shell. I think that changing the part of how the Scorpion died was a great. That way, the Tortoise has no blood in his hands, but the scorpion was the victim of his wicked circumstances.
One recommendation that I would make is about the website. Is great that you include a link to your comment wall in the home page, but I think you might want to include it as a footer so that you can get to the comment wall from any page in the site.