Week 6 Story, The Tortoise, the Scorpion, and the Hare


The Tortoise, the Scorpion, and the Hare


There once was a scorpion and tortoise that were a close as could be. As odd as this friendship looked, for some reason it worked. The scorpion was small but mighty and the tortoise was large yet gentle. The best friends did everything together. They went drinking together at the village watering hole, they gossiped about other animals together, even took long day trips together to the next town to shake up their normal routine.

The day trips were the tortoise's favorite thing to do. He would place the scorpion on his back to make sure he never got tired with his small legs. They would play your typical road trip games like I-Spy but no one ever really won or lost for that matter since everything was grey. On one of the trips, the tortoise and scorpion ran into an old hare they knew. The tortoise and the hare were notorious for not seeing eye to eye. They were always getting into arguments about conflicting views like whether things should be done as quickly as possible or as carefully as possible.

Finally, on that one day trip, the tortoise and the hare decided to settle their argument. The hare called for a race. The tortoise was scared he would be embarrassed but was too stubborn to back down from the challenge. All the animals in the nearest town heard about the race and quickly came over to line the course and see the tortoise crazy enough to race a hare.

The race started off like everybody, including the tortoise, thought it would. The hare was easily beating the tortoise. By the time the hare got halfway through the race, he decided to take a nap. He, of course, had plenty of time. The hare instructed tortoise's best friend, the scorpion, to wake him up if the tortoise starts to get close (which would not be anytime soon). The scorpion then asked, "Why would I help you? The tortoise is obviously my best friend." Sadly enough when the hare offered 3 gold pieces he was happy to help his friend lose.

As soon as scorpion saw that his best friend was getting close he tried to wake the hare; however, he was deep in slumber. The scorpion really wanted those gold pieces so he decided to take matters into his own hands, figuratively. The scorpion called up to the tortoise, "Carry me across the finish line, my friend! The hare has yet to cross it, you are going to win!" The tortoise quickly (well as quickly as the tortoise could) scooped his friend up to place him on his back. All of a sudden the tortoise felt something scratching his shell. The tortoise asked, "What are you doing up there?" To which the scorpion responded, "I am trying to see if I can sting you through your shell." Feeling completely betrayed by his old friend, the tortoise shook the scorpion off and left him in the dust. Moments after the hare awoke, he quickly raced to the finish line where the tortoise was waiting. The hare was running so quickly he didn't notice that he stepped on and killed the scorpion: a rightful fate for a bad friend like him.

The scorpion trying to sting his best friend the tortoise. 
Photo posted by Claira D. on Deskgram


Authors Note:
This story was originally only about the tortoise and the scorpion and it didn't involve the hare at all. In the original story, the two friends were trying to cross a river when the scorpion tried to stab his friend in the back. I completely changed the story by adding in my take on the tortoise and the hare as well and getting rid of the original plot. I decided to keep the tortoise and the scorpion characters though because I think it really helps play into the message of the story: Even best friends try to stab you in the back, make sure you have your own back and don't stab anyone in the back yourself because they will find out. I also changed the fact that the tortoise didn't kill his friend. Instead, I wanted the hare the scorpion made a deal with to carry out his fate. I think it was much more appropriate for his "partner" in the deal to come back and kill the scorpion.

Story Source: The Tortoise and the Geese and Other Fables of Bidpai by Maude Barrows Dutton, with illustrations by E. Boyd Smith, 1908.

Comments

  1. Hi Maryellen!

    I knew exactly where this story was going because I read the source story! This is such an interesting take on the story. I really like that you used the trope of the tortoise and the hare while making it your own. I can't believe that the scorpion was trying to betray his friend like that! To think, you play ISPY with a guy for years..

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  2. Maryellen,

    I like your version of this story very much! The way you resolved the conflict in a just, appropriate way resonated well with me. I'm glad you decided to tackle this classical story and make it your own. Great work, and I look forward to reading more stories that you come up with!

    Best of luck with your future writing!

    -Lance J.

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  3. Hi there Maryellen!

    Wow, I really enjoyed how you took these two fables and combined them! I'm really impressed that you were able to keep the morals to both stories intact even as you combined them and added your own twist. I also liked how you had the tortoise take the high road, and karma took care of the scorpion instead of the tortoise killing his former friend. I look forward to reading more of your stories!

    -Kate

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  4. Hey Maryellen,

    I think you did a wonderful job on this story. You do a great job of grabbing your reader’s attention and maintaining it throughout the story. Your author’s note was very helpful for guiding your reader. Your character development was also excellent throughout. I look forward to reading more in the future.

    -Andy

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  5. Hi Maryellen,
    I am back! I really like your combination of two stories into this one. I thought it was funny when the tortoise asked the scorpion what he was doing and how honest the scorpion was. What a twist at the end with the hare killing the traitor. I had never read the story, and your author's note really helped me visualize the original. Keep up with the good work!

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